sea
my body is ten feet under disgrace valley
Gabelle between her labyrinthus
dealer sans-culottes told her
the smoky room may be
travelling by speed of light
the eolian disk awaits
words make for a carnage
before she receives the heliocentric sheet
ejecta
5 comments:
i feel there is a lot of sexuality expressed here and i dont think i can place it with something concrete, but it does leave a certain sorrowful? feeling...very interesting poem.
Well, there is much tension going on here.
I definitely feel that tension, and I especially like the line "words make for a carnage" and the whole final stanza.
I like this a lot. And I love the way you frame this with the opening and closing words standing alone.
A fine disordering of the senses. Such is love captured and displayed. Fine work PO. Bravo!
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