Thursday, March 4, 2010

ineluctable warming produces tremors

tsunami lapping
axis thrusting to and fro
aftershocks abound


Francis Scudellari said...

I've been contemplating a quake poem. The earth, she ain't happy right now. I like the assonance of this piece.

human being said...


the new world order
on and under the cover
will there be a new me?


Jenny said...

I really like:

"tsunami lapping
axis thrusting"

The urgency is presented in a powerful way. The state of the Earth is devastating and sad.

gerry boyd said...

I guess I was being too subtle, edit pending. Future apologies to Carole King.

Anonymous said...

I like how the piece ends with the sound of "abound". It gives resonance. Oh, I like the rest of the text too, not just that one word.

Megan Duffy said...

Not subtle at all.
Works well.

human being said...

the subtlety is in the eye of the beholder...


Socially Awkward Paint Monster said...

^ how I agree to this.

you use 'thrusting' and 'abound' and call it subtle.
I liked this.

Francis Scudellari said...

I tend to read with innocent eyes :)