I've been contemplating a quake poem. The earth, she ain't happy right now. I like the assonance of this piece.
.the new world orderon and under the coverwill there be a new me?.
I really like:"tsunami lappingaxis thrusting"The urgency is presented in a powerful way. The state of the Earth is devastating and sad.
I guess I was being too subtle, edit pending. Future apologies to Carole King.
I like how the piece ends with the sound of "abound". It gives resonance. Oh, I like the rest of the text too, not just that one word.
Not subtle at all. Works well.
the subtlety is in the eye of the beholder...:)
^ how I agree to this.you use 'thrusting' and 'abound' and call it subtle.Noh!I liked this.
I tend to read with innocent eyes :)
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